Adequate and Inadequate Cohesion ( Third Assignment)

How the way to write paragraph with adequate and inadequate cohesion? Well, below will explain the way to write paragraph with adequate and inadequate cohesion.

When we talk about paragraph, exactly we talk about adequate and inadequate cohesion. It become thing that can’t separated. Before we talk about paragraph, we should know, what is paragraph? According to Smalley and Ruetten, 2002 Paragraph is a group of sentence and that the first sentence of this group is indented. The second definition is a group of sentence that develops one main idea or topic. From those two definition of the paragraph, it can conclude that paragraph is a the combination more than 2 sentence in writing  which every sentence related each other and develop on one main idea.

When we write a paragraph with adequate and inadequate cohesion, we should have relevance and order in our writiing. The simple way to make cohesion between our sentence is to look the meaning of it and compare with the piont of next sentence. The sentence also wrote orderly and logical. After we use both, automaticly our writing have connection of the ideas at sentence level 

Cohesion

After we talk about how the way to write paragraph with adequate and inadequate cohesion, we also have to talk about cohesion. When we write a paragraph, we also care about the cohesion in our writing. Cohesion deals with unity of sentence. Unity of sentence means  that idea in every sentence must have connection between one sentence and the next sentence. Cohesion is needed to make good sentence which has connection each other. If a paragraph has coherence and cohesion unity, the reader can understand what the writer means clearly.

  

The Differences between Cohesion and Coherence 

Cohesion and coherence has some differences that will mention below:

1.      Cohesion is all the parts or ideas which fit together well, on other hand

Coherence is the logical and orderly relation and understandable.

2.      Cohesion refers to connectivity in a sentence, whereas

Coherence refers to connectivity in a text.

3.      Cohesion means the connection of ideas at the sentence level, whereas Coherence means the connection of ideas at the idea level.

Descriptive Paragraph

All of About Me

I am going to write about my self. I will write all of about me. It is about my identity, my appearance, my hobby, and  my education background.  I want you know me so well after you finish read this paragraph. If we can know each other, everything gonna be easy. So, read this paragraph carefully. My name is Adelina Octa Puspita.  There is Octa word in my name because I was born on October. So, my parents adds Octa in my name. Most of my friend call me Adel or Lina I was born 19 years ago. Exactly, it was on October 11^st,1994. I was born in Rama Indra Village, Seputih Raman, Central Lampung. Now, I am as student in Muhammadiyah University of Metro, Lampung. I am in English Education Program and I am in 4^th semesters. I live in my village, that is Rama Indra Village. I live with my lovely father and my mother. I am only daughter in my family. I don’t have brother or sister. Since I study in University, I live in my boarding house. It is at Rambutan Street no 10 Iring Mulyo, East Metro. Physically, I have oval face. I have thick black eye brow. I also have a beautiful small black eyes. There is a mole under my left eye. My nose is not too pointed but not too flat also. I have thin red lips. My chin is oval. My hair is long brown hair. All of them make me look beautiful. Moreover when I use veil, I will look more beautiful. I have bright brown skin. My height is 168cm and my weight is 52kg. I think my height and my weight is not balance because my weight should 58kg. Some of my friends think that I will look so fat if I increase my weight. So, I think that I don’t need to increase my weight. I am good at English. That is the best thing that I have now. Because of it I study in English Education Program. I have to thank God because he gives me more ability in english. I have more than two hobbies. They are reading, listening to the music, and watching west movie. I like to do it to increase my english skill. I not only like reading knowladge book but also fiction book such as novel. Many novel books that I have read, for example Ayat-Ayat Cinta. I like romance story. In my spare time I usually do my assignment because in this semester I have many assignment. If I bored with my activity, sometime I open my Facebook or  watching movie. It litle bit makes me relax. That’s the description about my self, I think it will be better if everyone call me Adel. I will study hard to graduate from English Education Program in time. I will use my spare time to do usefull thing such as, do my assignment and increase my english by listening or watching west music or movie. And I never forget to pray to the God for asking his blessing.

Analyzing

The sentences which underline below are sentence that has adequate and inadequate cohesion.

            All of About Me

1) I am going to write about my self. I will write all of about me. It is about my identity, my appearance, my hobby, and  my education background.  I want you know me so well after you finish read this paragraph. If we can know each other, everything gonna be easy. So, read this paragraph carefully. 2) My name is Adelina Octa Puspita.  There is Octa word in my name because I was born on October. So, my parents adds Octa in my name. Most of my friend call me Adel or Lina.  3) I was born 19 years ago. Exactly, it was on October 11^st,1994. I was born in Rama Indra Village, Seputih Raman, Central Lampung. 4) Now, I am as student in Muhammadiyah University of Metro, Lampung. I am in English Education Program and I am in 4^th semesters. 5) I live in my village, that is Rama Indra Village. I live with my lovely father and my mother. I am only daughter in my family. I don’t have brother or sister. Since I study in University, I live in my boarding house. It is at Rambutan Street no 10 Iring Mulyo, East Metro. Physically, I have oval face. I have thick black eye brow. I also have a beautiful small black eyes. There is a mole under my left eye. My nose is not too pointed but not too flat also. I have thin red lips. My chin is oval. My hair is long brown hair. All of them make me look beautiful. Moreover when I use veil, I will look more beautiful. I have bright brown skin. 6) My height is 168cm and my weight is 52kg. I think my height and my weight is not balance because my weight should 58kg. Some of my friends think that I will look so fat if I increase my weight. So, I think that I don’t need to increase my weight. 7) I am good at English. That is the best thing that I have now. Because of it I study in English Education Program. I have to thank God because he gives me more ability in english. 8) I have more  than two hobbies. They are reading, listening to the music, and watching west movie. I like to do it to increase my english skill. I not only like reading knowladge book but also fiction book such as novel. Many novel books that I have read, for example Ayat-Ayat Cinta. I like romance story. In my spare time I usually do my assignment because in this semester I have many assignment. If I bored with my activity, sometime I open my Facebook or  watching movie. It litle bit makes me relax. That’s the description about my self, I think it will be better if everyone call me Adel. I will study hard to graduate from English Education Program in time. I will use my spare time to do usefull thing such as, do my assignment and increase my english by listening or watching west music or movie. And I never forget to pray to the God for asking his blessing. 

The sentences had underlined is categorized into cohesion because:

1)      First underlined sentences’ ideas is thing that the writer will do.

2)      Second underlined sentences’ ideas is the writer’s name. Each sentences has connection when tell the writer’s name.

3)      Third underlined sentences’ ideas is when the writer was born.

4)      Fourth underlined sentences’ ideas is the writer’s education program. The first sentence tell about where the writer’s university and continued with write’s program in her university.

5)      Fifth underlined sentences’ ideas is tell about the writer’s live.

6)      Sixth underlined sentences’ ideas is tell about the condotion of the write’s weight and heigh that explain in the next sentence.

7)      Seventh underlined sentences’ ideas is the best thing of the writer.

8)      The last underlined sentences’ ideas is the hobbies of the writer.